Post by Eden on Dec 10, 2020 22:49:30 GMT -5
Christy Winters
The twist of the bet made and the bribe to throw the match was interesting. All in all, Christy stepped up to bat here. gg
Belladonna Hunter
I honestly hated starting my judging and feedback because I dreaded this match. I don't want either one of you to have to leave. Regardless of outcome, keep on trying, sis. The work? Might be a personal best for the writer. We were given more this time, a little character development with the friendship with Gothica and Hellion, some words to Matthews. With as much history as this feud has, though, and being that it's all or nothing, it feels like more could've been said? Go over the things Chris has done, what that meant to you, what that makes him in your eyes.
Chris Matthews
LIGHTEN UP THE BLUE. It's too close to the light/dark level of the gray of the background. I don't deduct points for color, but if you persist in making it a color I can't read AND persist in refusing to use quotation marks to designate your speech, so I can't tell the difference in speech and narrative after I remove the formatting from your post? It's going to cost you. It's already a pretty bad idea to lean on color-formatting or italics or such as a way to distinguish speech-- that's a crutch that enables lazy writing. "The cell of the roof is the most dangerous part of the cell." You mean the roof of the cell? " You know deep down that you can measure up to me." She can? Proofreading is needed. Managed to sell the cell, if not Hunter, with use of history-- dug that bit.
Jonathan Edwards
"You don't care and never will about that belt, and never will." Was that a case of intentional repetition or another place that needs proofreading? Because it felt like the latter. This one had a bit of a slow, plodding pace and felt a tad repetitive, but the insight into Edwards' upbringing shed light onto his perspective going into this. That felt like a big movement in your portrayal of him.
Chucky Ross
Imaginative. Well put together. Maybe a personal best for the writer. This one surprised me.
Tora Nishida
"It's why I brought them here to sanatorium, to not only show how good they are with a bigger audience, but also help this brand that's lacking in tag teams." But... don't... people end up in Sanatorium because of convictions? Kayfabe. Maybe a tangent could've made it make sense but it felt like a slip up. Still, overall, a strong entry for the writer, just not strong enough to keep the belt unfortunately.
Hugh Merus
Skellies. :3 'Embrace the madness of the Sanatorium' is dead on, my undead friends. Dig the rotating holidays powering them as a theme. I guess the argument could've been stronger but on a personal level idgaf, I just... kinda needed a happy read today. Thank you.
John Blade
This was even less coherent than usual for John Blade. I feel dumber for having read this. May God have mercy on your soul.
Phantom
Oh hey, Phantom came to play here. The first real rundown of others in the match so far, and a well done one at that. Circling back after reading everything? This almost took it. You don't know how hard it was to pick between you and Aaron Jones. I wish I could make second place look better, because you deserved it. A+ effort here.
Mike Lavicle
And this time of Mike and Hugh competing separately, Mike's piece feels like it stacks up to his brother's. It might not have the same madcap levity that warms my soul, but it does bring the relevance-- while keeping that relevance innovative.
Sarah Lynn
Sarah Lynn is all business and makes some points here. Though I'm still left wondering who Sarah Lynn is?
Mya Denton & Abby Evans
Despite booking both these ladies and knowing they shared a writer, I wasn't expecting a team-up-- and given the match dynamic, it's a good surprise. This one felt like it had a bit more substance than the writer's usual offerings, even if in part probably because it was covering two characters at once.
Rey Lobo
I'm appreciating the in-focus look at each of the brothers here. As much as selling the duo as a team is important every other booking? You, like the Skellies, took the opportunity of this match and the time to show me their individuality, and I dig it.
Aaron Jones
For as much as you're usually story heavy, this match forcing you to go promo heavy didn't make you lose a beat. If anything, stronger. It feels like you really have Aaron's voice easily in your grasp.
Dark Wolf
A contrast to Rey's, very much darker if shorter. We know who the brawler is now.
RANKINGS REFRESHMENT
At this juncture I do a bi-annual freshening up of rankings, which means I start a new spreadsheet-- entry 1 is your ranking as it stood before Grindhouse, entry 2 is Grindhouse's score, entry 3 will be the next weekly, ect. I will always do these at ppvs, though not every ppv necessarily.
RANKINGS
9. Tora Nishida 13.1665
10. Dark Wolf 12.833
The twist of the bet made and the bribe to throw the match was interesting. All in all, Christy stepped up to bat here. gg
Belladonna Hunter
I honestly hated starting my judging and feedback because I dreaded this match. I don't want either one of you to have to leave. Regardless of outcome, keep on trying, sis. The work? Might be a personal best for the writer. We were given more this time, a little character development with the friendship with Gothica and Hellion, some words to Matthews. With as much history as this feud has, though, and being that it's all or nothing, it feels like more could've been said? Go over the things Chris has done, what that meant to you, what that makes him in your eyes.
Chris Matthews
LIGHTEN UP THE BLUE. It's too close to the light/dark level of the gray of the background. I don't deduct points for color, but if you persist in making it a color I can't read AND persist in refusing to use quotation marks to designate your speech, so I can't tell the difference in speech and narrative after I remove the formatting from your post? It's going to cost you. It's already a pretty bad idea to lean on color-formatting or italics or such as a way to distinguish speech-- that's a crutch that enables lazy writing. "The cell of the roof is the most dangerous part of the cell." You mean the roof of the cell? " You know deep down that you can measure up to me." She can? Proofreading is needed. Managed to sell the cell, if not Hunter, with use of history-- dug that bit.
Jonathan Edwards
"You don't care and never will about that belt, and never will." Was that a case of intentional repetition or another place that needs proofreading? Because it felt like the latter. This one had a bit of a slow, plodding pace and felt a tad repetitive, but the insight into Edwards' upbringing shed light onto his perspective going into this. That felt like a big movement in your portrayal of him.
Chucky Ross
Imaginative. Well put together. Maybe a personal best for the writer. This one surprised me.
Tora Nishida
"It's why I brought them here to sanatorium, to not only show how good they are with a bigger audience, but also help this brand that's lacking in tag teams." But... don't... people end up in Sanatorium because of convictions? Kayfabe. Maybe a tangent could've made it make sense but it felt like a slip up. Still, overall, a strong entry for the writer, just not strong enough to keep the belt unfortunately.
Hugh Merus
Skellies. :3 'Embrace the madness of the Sanatorium' is dead on, my undead friends. Dig the rotating holidays powering them as a theme. I guess the argument could've been stronger but on a personal level idgaf, I just... kinda needed a happy read today. Thank you.
John Blade
This was even less coherent than usual for John Blade. I feel dumber for having read this. May God have mercy on your soul.
Phantom
Oh hey, Phantom came to play here. The first real rundown of others in the match so far, and a well done one at that. Circling back after reading everything? This almost took it. You don't know how hard it was to pick between you and Aaron Jones. I wish I could make second place look better, because you deserved it. A+ effort here.
Mike Lavicle
And this time of Mike and Hugh competing separately, Mike's piece feels like it stacks up to his brother's. It might not have the same madcap levity that warms my soul, but it does bring the relevance-- while keeping that relevance innovative.
Sarah Lynn
Sarah Lynn is all business and makes some points here. Though I'm still left wondering who Sarah Lynn is?
Mya Denton & Abby Evans
Despite booking both these ladies and knowing they shared a writer, I wasn't expecting a team-up-- and given the match dynamic, it's a good surprise. This one felt like it had a bit more substance than the writer's usual offerings, even if in part probably because it was covering two characters at once.
Rey Lobo
I'm appreciating the in-focus look at each of the brothers here. As much as selling the duo as a team is important every other booking? You, like the Skellies, took the opportunity of this match and the time to show me their individuality, and I dig it.
Aaron Jones
For as much as you're usually story heavy, this match forcing you to go promo heavy didn't make you lose a beat. If anything, stronger. It feels like you really have Aaron's voice easily in your grasp.
Dark Wolf
A contrast to Rey's, very much darker if shorter. We know who the brawler is now.
RANKINGS REFRESHMENT
At this juncture I do a bi-annual freshening up of rankings, which means I start a new spreadsheet-- entry 1 is your ranking as it stood before Grindhouse, entry 2 is Grindhouse's score, entry 3 will be the next weekly, ect. I will always do these at ppvs, though not every ppv necessarily.
RANKINGS
- Hugh Merus 16
- V 15.5
- Mike Lavicle 15.4
- Aaron Jones 15.25
- Christy Winters 14.5
Phantom 14.5
6. Jonathan Edwards 14.2
7. Chucky Ross 13.5
Elijah Copeland 13.5
8. Sarah Lynn 13.3756. Jonathan Edwards 14.2
7. Chucky Ross 13.5
Elijah Copeland 13.5
9. Tora Nishida 13.1665
10. Dark Wolf 12.833